I strongly believe that war should not be declared because war is dangerous and can be killed by people with weapons. As a matter of time war should not happen again because everything is modern. There are only two most important war in the world which are ‘World War One’ and ‘World War Two’. Imagine how do you felt about people died in the past few years. Especially in World War One, every year they have remembrance day which is held in Sunday to think about the people who died recently between 1914-1918. In wars, we will lose the people of the world by getting killed. The people of the world need to stay alive in a positive way. In World War 1, it only happen between 1914-1918 and in World War Two, it only happen between 1939-1945. For children, some of the relatives like your parents ready to go to war and if they got killed the children will do nothing and they will be in a rest of the life doing nothing. The deadliest war in the world is World War Two with 60–85 million people got killed. You know that war is very destructive. It will destroy human nature and houses. In wars, there are hospital when people got injured or died. There shouldn’t be a war because you only just killing people which shows no kindness. War is just a waste of time because once it destroys you going to have to rebuild it. The worst war that you will ever have is the civil war which is that you just fight each other. World War One held in Belgium in a Battlefield near Ypres. War is a types of disaster which is violent. Some weapons are poison by dangerous chemical.
May 6, 2015 at 12:02 am
Sir I couldn’t make it to 700 words. Now I make it to 300 words.
June 21, 2015 at 7:39 pm
Hi Sammy,
Good effort on this piece of writing. My advice to you is to try and divide it up into topics and then write a paragraph on each of those topics. Writing in one continuous “chunk” like this is a sure way to confuse the reader and run out of ideas quickly.
Have alook at the examples on the “Achievements” site if you’re stuck.
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-two-writing/expository-essay/